I'll try this...My Poem

[simba]

Pack of Wolves

Prowling through the moonlit woods,in search of something they could call "food",the alpha male confidently leads,his wife coming right behind him.Their loyal pack,never disobeying,run after them,their steady steps pounding.And finally,he raised his head and gave a long,deep howl,saying:We have finally found something to really prowl.A deer,running for it's dear life,from the wolves,the never failing hunters of the night.Closer and closer they came,seemed like there's no way they could anymore fail.But wait,something happened,and it was better the one being hunted than the ones who hunted.The wind changed,the deer got away,leaving a pack of wolves behind,sniffing the air.

[simba]

Is it too much asked to get little comments??

[MysticDreamer543]

Hmm... I'm not one to criticize, but... I kinda think you should make stanzas (Like:
Line 1
Line 2
Line 3
etc.) Or whatever... But I like it! ^^

[xxzatchbellxx]

[glow=red,2,300]you need to put it in more of a poetic format[/glow]

[shan]

I'm not the biggest poetry person there ever was but maybe to make it easier to read you can put it into lines instead of a huge clump of words.....just a suggestion!

[shan]

Yeah, pretty much what they just said....I couldn't think of how to word it!

[amherst]

I like it.. when I first read it.. I thought you got lost and started rping in here though